Nina Blythe
Dr. Tinberg
English 101
Annotating a Scholarly Article
Pepper, Shayne. "Invisible children and the cyberactivist spectator." Nebula 6.4 (2009): 40+. Academic OneFile. Web. 17 Apr. 2012.
In his essay Pepper analyzes Invisible Children and their and cyberactivist movement. He gives a full background on the foundation and tells the reader what it’s all about. He shows how the Invisible Children founders spread their important message in new ways that no other foundations have done before. They took videos and posted them on Google video and social networking sites such as Facebook and Myspace. They developed their own website and let people know that just by watching the film they became an activist. On every DVD came a list of things that the viewer could do to help the cause such as liking the videos on you tube, passing the DVD on to friend, donating money to the website, posting the video to your social networking profile, or wearing the merchandise to raise awareness. This attracted thousands of young people and is still continuing to grow on the internet , but recently they have held events to raise awareness and donate money to the cuase.
Peer Review Reading Journal
ReplyDeleteReviewer’s Name: Krystal Bettencourt
Date: 4/17/12
Partner’s Name and Title of Paper Reviewed: Nina Blythe Invisible children
In your own words, fully and with precision, describe what the assignment is asking the writer (your partner) to do? Please use your own words rather than merely quote from the assignment.
In this assignment you are suppose to have full citation in MLA style. You should use single phrases to make sure the authors clear ownership over the ideas. You should accurately represent the argument of your source and use your own words. You should also answer the following questions: What do I know about the author that would make the article credible? How recently was it published? How credible is the journal in which the essay appears? What audience is the article intended for? How successfully does the article consider that audience? What is the author’s purpose? What is her bias, if any? What kind of evidence is given? How effective is it? What is not stated in the article that needs to be noted? Also should be two paragraphs long.
To what extent has your partner met the expectations of the assignment? Please pick a passage as illustration and describe what works well there. Again, try to use your own words.
I think that’s Nina is off to a great start. She did her citation in MLA format.( Pepper, Shayne. "Invisible children and the cyber activist spectator." Nebula 6.4 (2009): 40+. Academic OneFile. Web. 17 Apr. 2012.) She showed argument of your source and use your own words. (In his essay Pepper analyzes Invisible Children and their and cyber activist movement. He gives a full background on the foundation and tells the reader what it’s all about. He shows how the Invisible Children founders spread their important message in new ways that no other foundations have done before.)
What area needs more work? Why? Please pick a passage as illustration and describe what isn’t working.
Nina needs to show come single phrases to make sure the authors clear ownership over the ideas. She also need to answer these questions in here paragraphs (What do I know about the author that would make the article credible? How recently was it published? How credible is the journal in which the essay appears? What audience is the article intended for? How successfully does the article consider that audience? What is the author’s purpose? What is her bias, if any? What kind of evidence is given? How effective is it? What is not stated in the article that needs to be noted.) she also need an another paragraph because she only has one.
“ In his essay Pepper analyzes Invisible Children and their and cyberactivist movement. He gives a full background on the foundation and tells the reader what it’s all about. He shows how the Invisible Children founders spread their important message in new ways that no other foundations have done before. They took videos and posted them on Google video and social networking sites such as Facebook and Myspace. They developed their own website and let people know that just by watching the film they became an activist. On every DVD came a list of things that the viewer could do to help the cause such as liking the videos on you tube, passing the DVD on to friend, donating money to the website, posting the video to your social networking profile, or wearing the merchandise to raise awareness. This attracted thousands of young people and is still continuing to grow on the internet , but recently they have held events to raise awareness and donate money to the cause.” She also has some minor errors.
Please indicate TWO questions about the draft and at least ONE suggestion for ways to improve it.
What made you want to write about this topic?